This is somewhere between a first and final draft…if you’ve got any comments/feedback, I’d be happy to hear it!
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I have to admit that I love words like syzygy, synecdoche and metonymy. That’s one of the reasons I recently bought Rhetoric: Principles and Usage (1962, Richard E. Hughes and P. Albert Duhamel). The other (and better) reason is that I’m hoping to improve as a writer by broadening my horizons and addressing my weaknesses, rather than relying on native talent and hoping for the best. The book is a pleasant read, but, more importantly, it includes exercises. This morning I settled down at my typewriter to do one of the exercises, which I’ve decided to share on Windows of the Mind. The exercise was to describe the same place/event twice, first in an objective tone and then in an impressionistic tone. I enjoyed writing the two descriptions and being aware of how my style shifted — consciously and unconsciously — to accommodate the difference in tone.
Softly, uncurling into vision
Adrift, reaching for blossoming
Floating in the dark unknown
Searching for the unsought.
A thrust, breaking the surface
Extended, grasping at infinity
Straining at the lethargy of Ages
Striving for novelty.
drawn ever closer to the dancing flame,
yearning for that searing touch.
Hoping, clinging fervently to the future,
warned by the past.
Lost in the moment of a silent gaze,
breath held, waiting for release.
Strained, stretched between dreams and despair.
Bound, nearly bursting.